sorrow weeps winter's blue light mourning
it's inner siren
strangles hopes with tangled tears
and
blankets dreams of youthful temptations
everlasting regrets awaken empty half breaths
it's quickened tempo
surges awareness with heated panic
and
sparks impulses resonating shameful memories.
refresh
refresh
relive
panic
relive
repress
repress
deny
refresh
refresh
awaken
relive
panic
admit
admit itweep
weep
own it
own it
grieve
grieve
refresh
face it
own it
grieve
weep
learn
learn
learn
forgive
forgive
love
love
and dream again.
never let regret win
This week's Sunday Scribbling's prompt is regrets. We've all got a few. For more interesting perspectives, check out this site. You won't regret it.
18 comments:
perfect.
I agree...perfectly done. So much feeling! A beautiful poem about the struggles of life.
Irish...ooops, I altered it. :) just a bit of tweaking. the lack of flow was bugging me.
Poet....what I love about sunday scribblings is that it often frees me to express my feelings more openly disguised as a creative writing piece.
'admit it' - this should be gospel. x
for me the key is "forgive"... to move regrets "into hope" as another sunday scribbler said!! love your poem:)
I have to say that I've always loved the line "but then again, to few to mention!"
N.
i like the repetition of these simple single words!
Niki..i agree...I was thinking of the 4th step in the 12 step AA process.....it is the whole action of admiting. Ownership always leads to internally working on our own self forgiveness....
Karyne...i like that phrase.
N....me too. :)
floreta...i wanted to capture the process of forgiveness in steps. I'm glad to know it resonated with you. thanks.
Lovely. The repetitive words add so much and the rhythm makes it lyrically real.
i love that quote- regrets, i've had few, but in the end...
This is you on its best again. I haven't any regrets I needed the bad choices to learn and it has made me who I am today
this merited rereading a couple of times for me - wonderfully set up verse with the repetiton of the simple concepts at its end - wonderful artistry!!!
amen x
Thanks everyone....I certainly appreciate all your feedback....there's nothing like affirming feedback from other aspiring writers.
this aches with beauty
thank you my kindred friend....
I love this poem. It describes regret so poetically perfect. But in the end we must love. . . love love! As you so beautifully say. Thank you for the beautiful reminder! It touched my soul. . . and made my regret not feel so heavy today. Thanks for that!
Peace, Light and Love. . . Cordieb.
cordieb....love ourselves and others. nothing is more regrettable than losing the ability to forgive and love because of unresolved shame. thank you for dropping by. I appreciate your feedback.
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