Saturday, January 31, 2009

regrets, i've had a few


sorrow weeps winter's blue light mourning
it's inner siren
strangles hopes with tangled tears
and
blankets dreams of youthful temptations

everlasting regrets awaken empty half breaths
it's quickened tempo
surges awareness with heated panic
and
sparks impulses resonating shameful memories.

refresh
refresh
relive
panic
relive
repress
repress
deny

refresh
refresh
awaken
relive

panic
admit
admit it
weep
weep
own it
own it
grieve
grieve

refresh
face it
own it
grieve
weep
learn
learn
learn
forgive
forgive
love
love

and dream again.


never let regret win


This week's Sunday Scribbling's prompt is regrets. We've all got a few. For more interesting perspectives, check out this site. You won't regret it.

18 comments:

a mouthy irish woman? ridiculous! said...

perfect.

Fledgling Poet said...

I agree...perfectly done. So much feeling! A beautiful poem about the struggles of life.

Awareness said...

Irish...ooops, I altered it. :) just a bit of tweaking. the lack of flow was bugging me.

Poet....what I love about sunday scribblings is that it often frees me to express my feelings more openly disguised as a creative writing piece.

Nikita said...

'admit it' - this should be gospel. x

swile67 said...

for me the key is "forgive"... to move regrets "into hope" as another sunday scribbler said!! love your poem:)

BreadBox said...

I have to say that I've always loved the line "but then again, to few to mention!"

N.

floreta said...

i like the repetition of these simple single words!

Awareness said...

Niki..i agree...I was thinking of the 4th step in the 12 step AA process.....it is the whole action of admiting. Ownership always leads to internally working on our own self forgiveness....

Karyne...i like that phrase.

N....me too. :)

floreta...i wanted to capture the process of forgiveness in steps. I'm glad to know it resonated with you. thanks.

Tumblewords: said...

Lovely. The repetitive words add so much and the rhythm makes it lyrically real.

Maggie May said...

i love that quote- regrets, i've had few, but in the end...

Marja said...

This is you on its best again. I haven't any regrets I needed the bad choices to learn and it has made me who I am today

danni said...

this merited rereading a couple of times for me - wonderfully set up verse with the repetiton of the simple concepts at its end - wonderful artistry!!!

Nikita said...

amen x

Awareness said...

Thanks everyone....I certainly appreciate all your feedback....there's nothing like affirming feedback from other aspiring writers.

paulwchambers said...

this aches with beauty

Awareness said...

thank you my kindred friend....

cordieb said...

I love this poem. It describes regret so poetically perfect. But in the end we must love. . . love love! As you so beautifully say. Thank you for the beautiful reminder! It touched my soul. . . and made my regret not feel so heavy today. Thanks for that!

Peace, Light and Love. . . Cordieb.

Awareness said...

cordieb....love ourselves and others. nothing is more regrettable than losing the ability to forgive and love because of unresolved shame. thank you for dropping by. I appreciate your feedback.